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Suspended Animation by ~chugglepuff:iconchugglepuff:



We will hide in rooms
of corpses in clear coffins;
our names carved into every surface,
our fortunes told in fish eyes
and sharks’ teeth.

We are frogs in formaldehyde,
puffed up like tear-stained faces,
motel pillows;

we are jellyfish in jars,
hanging like bleached willows;
tangled tentacles dangle, flaccid,
and spectres of the Pacific
will not stir us.

In the mother-of-pearl,
in the birds of paradise,
in the ribcages and tortoiseshells,
we linger, petrified,
and do not hope to be unearthed.



Now we stand like stick figures
pinned to twilight
as orange and blue hesitate in the sky;

starlings swarm across the stuttered sunset,
bubbling and breaking, meandering and mingling;
a sentient storm that plummets to the horizon
and rises on an unseen current.

In that paradise of half-light,
we wait and pretend
that you and I can stay undecided,
and time moves on without us.
©2008 ~chugglepuff
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If you've never been to a zoology museum or seen starlings deciding where to roost, I would thoroughly recommend that you do so, they're both so inspiring.
Daily Deviation, 2008-04-05

Daily DeviationAs ~DarlingDante says: "...chugglepuff uses her whimsical, descriptive style to capture the stifled emotions of preserved animals in a zoology museum" in the poem, Suspended Animation. (Suggested by ~DarlingDante and Featured by ^GeneratingHype)

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~CWnerd12:iconCWnerd12: Mar 15, 2008, 5:08:50 PM
hmmm the beginning seems a bit too surreal I think, probably should make it a bit more zoology-museum like, but otherwise this is nefteh. :nod: I like it very much!

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~DarlingDante:iconDarlingDante: Mar 15, 2008, 10:00:17 PM
Wow, that was incredible.

The imagery was spot on, even if a bit ambiguous.

Such precision with words, keep it up.

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*MatchstickART:iconMatchstickART: Mar 15, 2008, 10:59:15 PM
I really like the imagery you've created, absolutely amazing! I love "as orange and blue hesitate in the sky," an awesome line.

I disagree about the start; the surrealism of that first stanza gives the piece a bit of a mysterious feel, urging you to read on and find out what the rest of the poem is about.

:)
~SedahLiah:iconSedahLiah: Mar 16, 2008, 5:08:03 PM
It's poems like this one that make me love you and envy you all the more. You're so amazingly talented.=)

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~chugglepuff:iconchugglepuff: Mar 18, 2008, 2:37:50 PM
Thank you, and thanks for the fav!
I can kind of see what you mean, but I'm afraid it's staying as it is, I like it in all its weirdness ;P

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~chugglepuff:iconchugglepuff: Mar 18, 2008, 2:49:06 PM
Thank you ever so much!

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~chugglepuff:iconchugglepuff: Mar 18, 2008, 2:49:49 PM
And thanks for the fav :)

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~chugglepuff:iconchugglepuff: Mar 18, 2008, 3:13:26 PM
Thank you for the lovely comment! :D

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~chugglepuff:iconchugglepuff: Mar 18, 2008, 3:22:44 PM
:glomp: Thank you, that's such a wonderful compliment.

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~SedahLiah:iconSedahLiah: Mar 20, 2008, 6:38:51 PM
No problem.:hug:

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