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Star-Gazing by ~chugglepuff:iconchugglepuff:



Lying on yielding grass,
My hands a pillow for my head,
The glowing blackness still,
The night cold and crisp and dead;

Silently, the show begins,
The stars’ applause unheard:
A brilliant incandescence
Flits through the sky like a bird.

Emerald whispers rush through the dark,
The whole of the heavens ablaze;
The beautiful jade fills my vision,
The night a glistening haze.

I could not compare the beauty,
Or hope to explain that sensation,
That boundless radiance,
That feeling of elation.

And it fills me with wonder to think
That this feeling of absolute awe
Was shared with a caveman who stared at the stars
A million years before.
©2007-2008 ~chugglepuff
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Emotions are something we all have in common and can all share.

It's about the Northern Lights if you couldn't tell (I do not intend to insult your intelligence, please do not shout at me).

EDIT: Criticism discouraged because it's ancient now and I'm not likely to go over it, except to fix little punctuation errors etc.

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*Maskmaker24:iconMaskmaker24: Jun 30, 2007, 9:12:36 AM
This is amazingly emotional. I love it! Instant :+fav:
The imagery from the beginning was powerful, and it flowed so naturally I didn't even notice the rhyme scheme till the end!

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'Kill!' shouted Ford. He shouted it at his towel.
The towel leapt up out of Harl's hands.
This was not because it had any motive force of its own, but because Harl was so startled at the idea that it might.
- Douglas Adams
~chugglepuff:iconchugglepuff: Jun 30, 2007, 9:44:20 AM
Thanks so much! :hug: I'm pretty proud of this one, I will admit.

Were cavemen around a million years ago or just thousands? That point's been niggling at me for some time...

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A stitch in time mucks up the space-time continuum.

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*Maskmaker24:iconMaskmaker24: Jun 30, 2007, 10:10:36 AM
I think they were. The number was 6 million or 6 thousand, but I think 6000 was just the beginning of civilisation or something. Let me check. Aha. Wikipedia says neanderthals appeared 130 thousand years ago, but homo erectus was around 1.5 million years ago, so he'll do, I think. Caveman is a pretty general term anyway, and generalisation makes everything much easier :)
:hug:

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'Kill!' shouted Ford. He shouted it at his towel.
The towel leapt up out of Harl's hands.
This was not because it had any motive force of its own, but because Harl was so startled at the idea that it might.
- Douglas Adams
~damnedlostsoul:icondamnedlostsoul: Jun 30, 2007, 12:23:03 PM
this is pretty good... :)

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in the midst of a thousand drops of red, a howl was heard from his beaten wrists...

insanity has set in...

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Juan loves you.
~chugglepuff:iconchugglepuff: Jul 1, 2007, 3:10:04 AM
Thank you!

--
A stitch in time mucks up the space-time continuum.

Clicking this link will give you superpowers*.

*May just be a very sneaky way to make you look at my page. But probably not.